Everyday people go through everyday struggles, from not being able to find an outfit, to fighting to survive the deadly, cancer disease. We learn to overcome and fight through these challenges, its part of our human nature. And even if it is difficult or tiring, or even puts our lives in jeopardy, we always seem to get through them.
In the novella The Old Man and the Sea, by Ernest Hemingway,
“ ‘What do you have to eat?’ The boy asked.
‘A pot of yellow rice with fish. Do you want some?’
‘No. I will eat at home. Do you want me to make the fire?’
‘No. I will make it later on. Or I may eat the rice cold.’
‘May I take the cast net?’
‘Of course.’
There was no cast net and the boy remembered when they had sold it. But they went through this fiction every day. There was no pot of yellow rice and fish and the boy knew this too.” (16) This quote shows that the old man really doesn’t have food and he hasn’t eaten in so long. “There was no pot of yellow rice and fish and the boy knew this too.” This part in the quote tells you the boy knows the man has no food because he hasn’t caught a fish in days, and he is very poor, and has nothing. Plus, he lies to the boy because he doesn’t want the boy to worry about him not eating. He is old and needs nutrition, but he hasn’t had too much luck lately. But will his luck change on the 85th, as it has in the past? He would soon find out.
His luck changes after hooking a marlin on the line. But the fish does something out of the ordinary. He swims straight. He doesn’t swerve or try to get lose, he just swims and drags the boat and
While battling the violent elements of Mother Nature, the old man is also fighting to keep his eyes open. The old man has been following the marlin for three days at sea, and has barely gotten any sleep. And not to mention he sleeps on a pile of newspapers at home, and that can’t be too comfortable, and holding on to that big fish is tiring and sucking the energy right out of him. He is old and brittle and needs his rest. His hand is cramping from gripping the rough line for three days straight, He hasn’t had much rest of the boat, because he needs to keep an eye on the marlin. And when it was time to finally catch the marlin, he feels tired and finally admits it.
“I’m tireder than I have ever been, he thought, and now the trade wind is rising. But that will be good to take him in with [the marlin]. I need that badly.” (89)This quote shows how tired the old man is getting. He is malnourished and over tired, and he needs all the help he can get to catch fish.
After all that hard work and finally killing the beast of the sea,
Sharks can smell blood from 50 miles away! Their was blood leaking into the cool, ocean water from the gash on the side of the marlin, where
“ The shark’s head was out of water and his back was coming out and the old man could hear the noise of skin and flesh ripping on the big fish when he rammed the harpoon down onto the shark’s head at a spot where the line between his eyes intersected with the line that ran straight back from his nose.” (102) I picked this quote because it shows how
In conclusion we find that throughout the voyage of catching the marlin,
6 comments:
YOOOOOOOOO BRIANNA! Your essay was nasty I read it almost twice, not really though. But it was probably the best I read. Your opening thesis really caught my attention and drew me in to read the rest of the essay. The best quotation you use was the third and final. It was because this quote was at an pittimal time for Santiago and you had excellent supporting reasons. You had real good grammer, and adjectives describing numerous situations throughout the story. One thing I advize for your next story is work on the conclusion. You need to tie it all up better, but I thought you did a greaaaaaaaat job.
bri,
wow your story is really really good! i could tell right away what your thesis statement was.
all of your quotes were really well incorporated into the essay so its hard to just pick one.
i loved the whole thing. you used a lot of detail and there wasnt anything that i had to re-read because it didnt make sense.
only one thing i would change is to just add a little bit in the last paragraph. it kina just ended. other than that everything else is really good. GREAT JOB!
Heyy Brie,
I really like your essay. Your thesis statement s very clear and well wrtten. I like all of your paragraphs, but my favorite is when you talk about Santiago's struggle with money and food. Your quote, “ ‘What do you have to eat?’ The boy asked.
‘A pot of yellow rice with fish. Do you want some?’
‘No. I will eat at home. Do you want me to make the fire?’
‘No. I will make it later on. Or may eat the rice cold.’
‘May I take the cast net?’
‘Of course.’ There was no cast net and the boy remembered when they had sold it. But they went through this fiction every day. There was no pot of yellow rice and fish and the boy knew this too.” (16)
THis quote makes the reader picture a scene from the book and it really helps explain your thesis. Over all I love your essay!!
Brie,
I absolutely loved your thesis statement. It was very detailed, and made me very intrigued. “Everyday people go through everyday struggles, from not being able to find an outfit, to fighting to survive the deadly, cancer disease.” It was also very easy to locate. I think that the quote from the last supporting paragraph, about the sharks was the best because I think you gave the best details about it and you explained what you liked about that particular quote. The strongest point of your story was definitely your voice. I love how you incorporated your beliefs and opinions about the subject. I also like how you incorporated some questions to leave the reader thinking about. One thing to try to include for next time is a wider vocabulary range, but other than that, you did a fantastic job :)
Bri,
Your story is really good! I could tell right away what your thesis statement was.
All of your quotes were incorporated into the essay. Only one thing i would change is to just add a little bit in the last paragraph. Other than that everything else is really good.
BRIE!
great job!! i loved your essay. your thesis was really clear and strong. it was focused and drew the reader in. “Everyday people go through everyday struggles, from not being able to find an outfit, to fighting to survive the deadly, cancer disease.”
my favorite quote was “I’m tireder than I have ever been, he thought, and now the trade wind is rising. But that will be good to take him in with [the marlin]. I need that badly.” (89) it really showed what the old man was going through as he was trying to catch the marlin.
i think the thing you did best with this essay was writing style. you made it interesting.
i really dont have any advice i thought it was great. good job bud!!
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