11:52 AM
Mr. B-G
She had only been about eight
Was followed by an unknown fate
We’d liked to play and have some fun
April first two thousand and one.
When it ended, I was in shock
My face turned white as chalk
Killed by her mother’s oldest son
April first two thousand and one.
I didn’t know if it was a joke
My sound was reduced to a choke
And her life had barely begun
April first two thousand and one.
4 comments:
Libby, I really enjoyed your poem. I thought this was really deep and sad that this happened to your friend. I really liked the way you made everything come together. I also thought that the line you chose to repeat helped get the point across. You're a great poet. Nice job :]
LIBBY!
I wasn't surprised when your poem was amazing. You have a fantastic way with words. This poem is really touching because this was something in your life that you really had to deal with. I believe that the speaker was you, and you were just looking back at a sad time in your life. The theme is very sad, and it speaks to always rememebr your friends. This poem was amazing & i'll defintily check out your blog!
Amazing jobb!
I never thought, and i doubt you would've never thought, that a close person would go like that libby. Still a great poem though, despite the depressed tone of it. I really liek the refrains in it, the April 1st 2001, that was a really good quality of it. I liked how powerful the theme is, not taking life for granted. Very stong poem you've written Libby.
libby :D
Your poem was so sad. I could tell you really thought about this and put in alot of effort. I knew you were the voice, talking about your frind. I agree with lindsey, the line you repeated really helped get the message clear. I'm running out of time to respond! Great job!!!!!!!
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