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Mr. B-G
In every story the main character endures a problem or usually many problems. These problems could be mental or physical problems they endure. In the Old Man and the Sea Santiago goes through a number of both mental and physical problems that he overcomes to catch the biggest fish he has ever caught before. Santiago endures amazing physical pain everywhere on his body which is a physical problem. Also a big struggle he had to overcome was the fish was so big it was more powerful than him and he was only an old man so he had to find a way to beat him. Mentally Santiago was beat he had been trying to catch the big fish for three days now and he must have been ready to give up at many points but he stuck with it.
When Santiago first hooks the fish he has no idea of how big the fish really is until he gets it in close to the boat. At first he tried to pull him in but it was useless so he realized this was a pretty big fish and he had to beat him mentally. But physically after two days Santiago was hurt. His hands were bleeding and cut from the holding the line. Every pull the fish made it would worsen Santiago’s hands. Also he didn’t have any food or water so he had to catch his food. He caught a dolphin and ate some of that for some strength. He also found a flying fish inside the dolphin which would really help his strength. “He had no feeling in his left hand but he braked all he could with his right and the line rushed out” (82). This shows the pain Santiago had to go through but he never gave up.
Another problem Santiago had to endure was that the fish was so much more powerful he couldn’t beat him on pure strength. Santiago had to pull the fish in on circles so he could tire him out. Only he had another problem, he had to find the energy to do this. He couldn’t let the fish gain any ground when he pulled so this took a lot of strength. “The line went out and out but it was slowing now and he was making the fish earn each inch of it.” (83). So this shows how Santiago had to deal with the strength of the fish which was a huge problem.
Mentally Santiago was getting drained. He was after the fish for three days until he actually caught it and at times he was really close to just giving up. The strength it took and the pain was grueling and he felt he really couldn’t take any more of it. But somehow he found it inside himself to not give up and catch the fish. “It was a great temptation to resto in the bow and let the fish make one circle by himself without recovering any line.” (89). He wanted to give up but he never did so this shows his true character and how much he wanted it.
So you see all the grueling pain and problems Santiago had to endure while catching the fish. However he did catch the fish so it was all worth it. His hands and physical pain was killing him the whole trip but he still fought through it. The fish was so much stronger and bigger than Santiago that nobody would believe an old man like him could catch that fish after going 86 days without a single catch. The pain and lack of energy made him feel like quitting however he couldn’t do that he had to much respect for the fish. So this old man caught the biggest fish of his life and was very proud.
7 comments:
Richy, I liked your story. I thought your thesis statement was very clear and concise. Also, my favorite quote was the one about his hand. I though that was very interesting. I thought the best part of your essay was your quotation selection. Next time, I would consider editing your piece more to make it flow more smoothly and tie together.
Richy, overall I thought your essay was relatively good. It contained some good points and views. Your thesis is well written and clearly explained and presented. My personal favorite quote is the one found on page 82,"He had no feeling in his left hand but he braked all he could with his right and the line rushed out”. That is becasue it backs up your original thesis well and creates a good vivid image.
Your essay has a good introduction and conclusion that entice the reader and then tie up all loose ends at the conclusion. The only criticism I have is revise your essay before putting it up because you had some grammatical errors. I also thought you could have used better vocabulary, but in general your essay was good.
I thought the thesis was pretty clear, and it was pretty strong. I think that is focused on the main points of the story, and it was well written. I think that he needs to be a little more clear, and try and not say the same thing over again.
The first quote was my favorite. Because it was showing all the pain and determination he had to catch this fish. Also it was a good spot in the story to put that quote in.
I thought this story was well organize. It had well written paragraphs in the middle, and it had a good ending.
I think he needs to be more clear, and not be so repetitive.
This was a well thought out and well written essay. It had a nice thesis which focused on the main idea in the story. My favorite quote in this essay was,“The line went out and out but it was slowing now and he was making the fish earn each inch of it”(83). This quote really focuses on the main idea in the story on how the old man didn't have much energy, but he gave everything he had. Next time, I would consider editing your essay a liitle bit more. There were some grammer mistakes but other than that it was a well written essay. Nice work!!!
I like your thesis statement. It is very clear and brief. Your introductory paragraph was good.My favorite quote in the essay was “He had no feeling in his left hand but he braked all he could with his right and the line rushed out” (82). It was my favorite quote because it described how Santiago tried. Overall, your essay was pretty good and well organized.
Richy i though your thesis was really good and i thought it was really easy to understand what you were writing about. I thought you used good quotes and they fit your essay well. I understood your essay really well also because you used good descriptive words. I like the quote you used about his hand and i thought it was very interesting.
Richy, i liked your story a lot. i think you did a good job of putting the quotes into it. your thesis was also strong and you also compared it to the every day person. i think one thing you could maybe improve was how you said things in order. you used then repetatively.the quote i like the most that you used was the one from page 82.
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