Monday, March 24, 2008

By Connor F.

Throughout ones life, we face many obstacles and challenges, which not only change us, but shape the rest of our lives forever. In Old Man and the Sea, a novel written by Ernest Hemingway, the main character Santiago , a simple minded hard-working fisherman, is forced to deal with obstacles that change his life and him as a person. These nagging troublesome obstacles and challenges consist of fatigue, hunger, and sharks. These obstacles not only greatly infected the plot, but changed Santiago as man for the rest of his life.

Capturing a 12-foot marlin alone at sea is not an easy thing to do. Imagine being Santiago , an 80 year old man, in a petite skiff capturing something three times his size. It is amazing that a man that old struggles with only fatigue as one of his problems, and not facing his death. Santiago struggles with tiredness in the story when he says: “You are killing me, fish, the old man thought. But you have a right to. Never have I seen a greater, or more beautiful or a calmer or more noble thing than you, brother. Come on and kill me. I do not care who kills you.” (92). This quote shows his fatigue, because you can tell he is not only physically tired, but so mentally exhausted that he is pushed to such an extreme brink of destruction that he does not even care what happens with the marlin.

The second obstacle or challenge that Santiago faces on the open sea, is overcoming hunger. This could be looked at as his fault, for going out to sea ill prepared, but no one expects to be on a four day fishing trip chasing one marlin. Throughout the story Santiago neglects the pestering hunger, but at this point in the story he is finally forced to recognize it, : “And I do not know whether the sun will rot or dry what is left, so I had better eat it although I am not hungry. The fish is calm and steady. I will eat it then I will be ready.” (59). This directly shows how he is starving, because it shows that Santiago is finally making time to eat. It also shows that he must have been putting it off for a long time, and when the fish is calm he is making time to satisfy his own hunger.

The third and final obstacle and challenge that Santiago faces, is the ever relentless sharks. On his trip home, after finally catching the marlin, numerous sharks attack, and tear the marlin to pieces. He fends off many sharks and it shows it when he says,: “But I killed the shark that hit my fish, he thought. And he was the biggest dentuso that I have ever seen. And god knows I have seen big ones.” (103). Losing the marlin was a crushing blow to Santiago , he fought hard on the sea for four days, and to return home with nothing is heartbreaking. The quote directly shows how the sharks were a huge problem because he discusses how they are ever relentless and huge.

In conclusion, seeing how Santiago overcame many challenged throughout the novel, you can see how he is truly an amazing person. Santiago was an 80 year old man stuck alone at see on a tiny skiff, fighting something three times his size. But not only that, he had to also struggle with fatigue, hunger, and sharks that tried to kill him. This shows that Santiago is not only an extraordinary man, but also a pretty tough s.o.b. So next time you consider someone to be tough, picture an 80 year old frail man, capturing a giant, with nothing but a fishing pole and the determination given from god

8 comments:

Anonymous said...

Conner great essay,
Your essay was ver clear and down to the point. I think your thesis was that the things in the way if our lives can make it different depending on what we do about them.
“And I do not know whether the sun will rot or dry what is left, so I had better eat it although I am not hungry. The fish is calm and steady. I will eat it then I will be ready.” Ilike this quote because it shows how the old man kept putting off eating instaed he focused on catching the marlin.
I don't have much suggestions, I noticed one quote was missing a page number. Your conclusion was small, but still good. Nasty essay conner,peace homie!

Anonymous said...

I "These nagging troublesome obstacles and challenges consist of fatigue, hunger, and sharks."is the thesis statement. It is clear,but it is spread out over a few sentenses.

II “You are killing me, fish, the old man thought. But you have a right to. Never have I seen a greater, or more beautiful or a calmer or more noble thing than you, brother. Come on and kill me. I do not care who kills you.” (92) is thew strongest quote because it shows a lot about the old man and his view on the fish and the sea.

III One thing this essay does well is organization. All the quotes and paragraphs were right were they should be.

IV There were a couple gramatical errors and repetative sentenses in there that I would recomend fixing. Here's some examples...

"Throughout ones life, we face many obstacles and challenges," -Singular to plural transition mid sentence?
" These obstacles not only greatly infected the plot..."NEW ZOMBIE!
"Santiago struggles with tiredness in the story when he says:“You are killing me, fish, the old man thought. But you have a right to."-Time for some quote editing.

P.S.: Read Roga's essay!

Anonymous said...

Connor,
good essay. I thought your thesis statement was ok it was just a little long. You also got a couple facts mixed up throughout your story. You did use very good detail though in every paragraph. I thought your essay was very interesting and well-written. Good work.

Anonymous said...

conor,
first off everyone spelt your name wrong so i'll be the one to fix that. but anyway your story was amazinggg! i thought you did a great job on it! your thesis statement was clear and right to the point. "These nagging troublesome obstacles and challenges consist of fatigue, hunger, and sharks." I think that your strongest quote would have to be “You are killing me, fish, the old man thought. But you have a right to. Never have I seen a greater, or more beautiful or a calmer or more noble thing than you, brother. Come on and kill me. I do not care who kills you.” The best part about your essay would be your way of adding the quotes in, it was very smooth. you are missing a page number for a quote as mentioned before but overall i thought you did a great job on it!!!

Anonymous said...

Hehehehe hey Conor,
I didn't quite read your story but i just needed to comment to you cause i just needed to do that.
PEACE OUT SON

Anonymous said...

HELLO CONOR,
i thought your essay was very clear and well written. the only thing i would change in your essay would be that there was a couple grammar mistakes that you could fix. also, you repeated some of your ideas sometimes throughout the essay. and, you forgot to put the page number for one of the quotes. but other than that, your essay was really good.

Anonymous said...

heeey conor, have you settled thing with Fitz and Nate yet with halo?
1- Nice thesis, it explained well what was going on in the essay.
2- The best quote was your first one, it worked very nicely with the paragraph
3- Also your first paragraph sounded the best out of the essay
4- I notice only a couple of errors, just watch out for those.

Anonymous said...

sorry, forgot to sign my name
1- Nice thesis, it explained well what was going on in the essay.
2- The best quote was your first one, it worked very nicely with the paragraph
3- Also your first paragraph sounded the best out of the essay
4- I notice only a couple of errors, just watch out for those.