Monday, March 24, 2008

By Danny F.

In Ernest Hemingway’s The Old Man and the Sea, the main character, Santiago, makes some very important choices at the beginning of the book when he first sets off on his journey. For the past few weeks, he has had no luck and caught few fish, but at the start of the book, he believes he is due to catch a giant fish. When he begins his voyage, he carries little supplies on his skiff, including a bottle of water, fishing lines, hooks, and baits, a short club, the tiller, and the oars. However, his struggles with the giant Marlin he eventually catches while at sea would have been greatly lessened if he had thought to bring a few key items on his expedition, such as stronger rope, food and water, or better weapons. He made a choice to bring only the bare essentials and he would come to regret that decision more and more as he his forced to deal with its consequences.

Some items that would have been vastly effective in relieving the old man of great pain and hardship would be a stronger rope or a simple spring mechanism. “How simple it would be if I make the line fast, he thought. But with one small lurch he could break it. I must cushion the pull of the line with body and at all times be ready to give line with both hands.” (77) With a stronger rope or a spring to dampen the marlin’s abrupt tugs, the old man wouldn’t need to constantly hold the rope.

The old man does eventually catch the marlin through his great struggle, but he is left malnourished, and under slept and tired. Because of this, he loses his catch to attacking sharks on the way home. However, he might have saved some of his prize if he had chosen to bring along some better weapons. “I have the gaff now, he said. But it will do no good. I have the two oars and the tiller and the short club.” (112) With those supplies and his ingenuity, the old man is able to defend the fish from the sharks for a short time. But eventually he is defeated. With a second spear or longer stronger knife, he might have been able to save his fish even in his exhausted state. The old man uses lots of energy while trying to catch the great marlin. He must constantly hold the line once he catches the fish as well as do other fishing tasks, all under the hot sun.

To fuel his efforts, he has only what he caught at sea, such as the dolphin or flying fish. Although he is old and lost much of his hunger, he knows he must still eat and drink. He would have been very wise to bring along some extra food and water for his long voyage, but he chose not to. “I wish I had some salt. […] I had better eat it all although I am not hungry.”(59) Aside from energy, the old man also needs food to concentrate. He could have thrown some sea water on the ship and let it evaporate to get salt, but he forgot. Later on, he becomes very forgetful and finds it difficult to concentrate without nourishment.

In the end, the old man acknowledges his unfortunate choices at the beginning. He knows he was undersupplied. He should have prepared for the worst when he set off and been ready for anything. A few simple tools and supplies would have made his ordeal much easier. Granted he lives in a poor town and he himself has no money, but he surely could have rented or bought some or most of the supplies he would inevitably need, especially because he could pay for it afterwards with the money from the fish.

6 comments:

Anonymous said...

Your thesis wasn’t very clear, but it was there. I think your first paragraph needs to be edited also. There were sentences that made no sense in it. Your second quote was awesome because it tied in with what you were saying the best. You also explained it very well.
The best line that I liked was, “He must constantly hold the line once he catches the fish as well as do other fishing tasks, all under the hot sun.” I liked it because none of the other essays that I read said anything about the sun, which is an important factor in his well-being, and the book said nothing of him having a sunburn, which he should have had. Kudos to you! (Clap, clap, clap…)
My advice is to re-read your essays before posting them online. You don’t want people to think you’re intellectually defected, do you? What you needed to fix was your grammar, especially commas and run-on sentences. Your first paragraph was your worst, I have to say, because of those things. Also, some of your sentences were cut off, and then restarted in another sentence, and they didn’t make sense. With those few changes, your essay could be great. Good job!

Anonymous said...

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Anonymous said...

Hello Fitzy, and a very good story. The Thesis is still not clear, but remember to summarize the essay in one sentence. you can extract the information from the 1st paragraph though. the stongest quote is probably “I have the gaff now, he said. But it will do no good. I have the two oars and the tiller and the short club.” (112). Why this is the strongest is because it has the most infomation to express. what this essay does well is that it is very informative, and discriptive. One thing i would suggest is to add a little but more information in the 2nd paragraph, because it does not seem to have enough info.

Anonymous said...

The thesis of this essay was not clear. Your body paragraphs are about several different things that are not similar. However, you did write well about what you thought he could bring if he did this again. I thought it was good that you talked about using better equipment because I haven't read anything about that so far. My favorite quote was: “How simple it would be if I make the line fast, he thought. But with one small lurch he could break it. I must cushion the pull of the line with body and at all times be ready to give line with both hands.” (77). I liked that because it showed how unprepared Santiago was for this journey. Next time I'd make a stronger thesis and use better spelling.

Anonymous said...

fItZ,
To start, the thesis wasn't as clear as it could be, it left me a little confused...
But the rest of your essay was very nice. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
Your best quote was probably the one that read, “I have the gaff now, he said. But it will do no good. I have the two oars and the tiller and the short club.” (112). It is really descriptive and it shows a lot about your topic.
My favorote paragraph was the concluding paragrpah, it summed your story up nicely and was definitley original. Overall, nice story.

Anonymous said...

hi fitz, gettin better at Halo?
1- all of the thesis's were good, and yours was no different
2-the best quote was the third one, don't forget the page number next time. it was the one that best fit in there, and i never seen it in the others yet
3- i liked the the third paragraph the most, it was very clear how santiago's health was draining
4- don't forget to type the page numbers next time.