Monday, March 24, 2008

By Nate J.

Santiago faced many consequences during his time out at sea. He spent around two to three nights in the water, which can be very dangerous to your health if it rains. In the novella, The old man and the sea, by Ernest Hemmingway, Santiago’s decision was to stay with the Marlin, and his consequences of this action is the old man’s mental health deteriorating, getting a disease or getting sick from the raw fish he is eating, and his physical health deteriorating from his old age. All of these problems are important to his health, and extremely dangerous if he does not sustain his health out as sea.

Santiago had his mental health deteriorating during his time out at sea. Since there was no one on his boat with him while he sailed out, he started to wish that the boy was out there with them. So then, to still have some one to talk to, he started talking to the big fish, or his “brother”. “’How do you feel fish?’ he asked aloud. ‘I feel good and my left hand is better and I have food for a night and day. Pull the boat, fish.’”(74). This is his only communication or sociality that he can have with this marlin. This communication would have been seen as “crazy” to some people, but is as normal as to talking to a dog. This relationship with the fish makes him have an active motive to catch the fish, and lets the old man talk to someone during his time out at sea.

Next to his mental health, it is bad for him to eat raw fish too. If the fish has a disease, or has some problem with it’s body, it is possible for the old man to get sick. “’and what a miserable fish raw. I will never go in a boat again without salt or limes.’”(80). With salt or limes, added to raw fish is called ceviché , and it is like a cooker with out heat. It burns the meat of the fish, and in turn, killing the bacteria on the fish. The fish was also bad tasting with out salt, such as a dolphin. Dolphin is an excellent fish cooked, but to sweet to eat raw.

With his mental health deteriorating, and eating fish raw, his physical health was also deteriorating. When he was holding the wire with the marlin on the other side, he held it all night and then, in the morning when he woke up, he was brought in the morning with a cramp on his left hand. ”’What kind of hand is that,’ he said. ‘Cramp if you want. Make yourself a claw.’”(68). this quote shows that he does now the effects of having a cramp. His cramp was a problem throughout the book, because now, he had to hold the wire with his right hand, risking another cramp on his right. Under all odds, he makes it through the trip without his right hand cramping, and his left hand’s cramp leaving his body.

Santiago faces many consequences to his choice of staying out at sea with the marlin. Santiago’s decision to stay with the marlin is that the old man’s physical health was deteriorating, the possibility of getting sick from the raw fish, and his physical health deteriorating from his age. Facing all of these consequences, Santiago somehow makes it back to his home, but the satisfaction that he had caught an 18 foot marlin. Even thought his marlin was eating all of the marlin, he at least brought some reminisce of the fish to prove to everyone.

6 comments:

Anonymous said...

You had a thesis, but you didn’t sound too sure of yourself about it. Also, you should change your word choice a little because you said deteriorating twice in one sentence. You also forgot transitions. Your quotes were accurate and the format was correct. You fit them nicely into your essay, and they worked great. You also explained them well.
My favorite line was, “It burns the meat of the fish, and in turn, killing the bacteria on the fish. The fish was also bad tasting with out salt, such as a dolphin. Dolphin is an excellent fish cooked, but to sweet to eat raw.” I liked it because it shows you made connections to the book while you were reading. Also, it made me think of how much you like to cook. :)
My advice is to check your word choice next time. Some parts of your essay were great, but other parts need to be fixed. :( Also, you should try to use more voice and confidence in your essays.
BTW Nate, I saw your dad a couple weeks ago ‘cuz he’s selling a house near mine and he gave me an orange balloon. YAY!!! I like balloons! Bye! Great Job :)

Anonymous said...

I "You had a thesis, but you didn’t sound too sure of yourself about it. Also, you should change your word choice a little because you said deteriorating twice in one sentence. You also forgot transitions."~Jessica Rockin'r
I was going to say the same thing. "Santiago’s decision was to stay with the Marlin, and his consequences of this action is the old man’s mental health deteriorating, getting a disease or getting sick from the raw fish he is eating, and his physical health deteriorating from his old age." is the thesis statement. I think it's kinda run on. "All of these problems are important to his health, and extremely dangerous if he does not sustain his health out as sea." well thats what "deteriorating mental and physical helth" means.

II “’How do you feel fish?’ he asked aloud. ‘I feel good and my left hand is better and I have food for a night and day. Pull the boat, fish.’”(74) is the strongest quote because, although everyone is useing it, it is still a memerable quote from the book...Or is that BECAUSE every one is useing it?

III One thing the essay does well is that it sounds like you read the book and understand it well (even if you didn't).



IV For my piece of advice, i would, no I AM, saying to write your essays BEFORE midnight when you can't phathom laungage. There are lots of mistakes and errors in this essay. just to name a few...
"It burns the meat of the fish, and in turn, killing the bacteria on the fish. "-wait what?
"active motive " -What other kind is there?
"If the fish has a disease, or has some problem with it’s body, it is possible for the old man to get sick."-Where else could it have a problem? Isn't the old man used to eating raw fish? And didn't he eat a can of raw shark liver oil before or something?
"The fish was also bad tasting with out salt, such as a dolphin."-Dolphin are not fish. The old man doesn't know, but you should.
"Santiago’s decision to stay with the marlin is that the old man’s physical health was deteriorating, the possibility of getting sick from the raw fish, and his physical health deteriorating from his age."-That just doesn't make sense.
"Even thought his marlin was eating all of the marlin,"-how late were you up?

Anonymous said...

U know I wuz kidding >. Its a good essay,some parts were funny though. lol

Anonymous said...

Hello Nate!!! (I enjoy sittin' with u at lunch!! Yeah!)
I really liked your essay, I think YOU DID A GOOD JOB!! Despite what others have said :) Your thesis statement is very clear. And is pretty well written.

I think you strongest quote is, “’How do you feel fish?’ he asked aloud. ‘I feel good and my left hand is better and I have food for a night and day. Pull the boat, fish.’”(74)." I think that this is your best quote because it fitted well into what you wrote! :)

I think what you did best was in writing your conclusion paragraph.
"Even thought his marlin was eating all of the marlin, he at least brought some reminisce of the fish to prove to everyone." I like your word choice here!!

The only advice I would give you is......none!!!! You did a great job!!! Bye!

Anonymous said...

ROOOOOOOGA
I thought you story was very well written and your theme was well incorporated into your writing. I agree that Santiago is going a little crazy with all this talking to himself and the fish. He was even crazier when he was talking to the small bird that landed on his line. I think the old man was very prone to getting a food born illness from all the raw fish he ate. He gets very physically drained and should have eaten better food. I like when you talk about food roga it's hott. Great job man keep it up.

Anonymous said...

I know it's knid of odd commenting on yours when I haven't even turned in mine yet. But still, doesn't matter right now.
1- I'm not going to be as rash an Fitz, but still man, your thesis is good and all, but it's just kind of weak. it's focused, but it doesn't realyl pull you in.
2- Your first quote was the strongest, i think it just showed how the old man was starting to lose it.
3- You explain everything well Roga, expeccially all throughout your body paragraphs, but everyone can clearly see you did this late at night.
4- Once again, not being as rash as Fitz, but really, if you decide to do an essay as midnight, as least get up early and proofread it before you leave for school or something. Just be more careful looking out for errors, which were realyl hard to miss here, no offense.