Monday, March 24, 2008

By Lindsey H.

In The Old Man and the Sea, the main character, Santiago, faced many different obstacles on his treacherous fishing trip. Santiago faced fatigue, loneliness, and vicious sharks while on his trip. These obstacles aren't ones that people usually have to face on a daily basis unless you're a fisherman like Santiago, of course.

It took Santiago about three days to catch the marlin, and those three days wore him out excessively. Santiago didn't have much time to eat or sleep, so he was very tired and hungry which caused him to be fatigued. "'But you have not slept yet, old man,' he said aloud. 'It is half a day and a night and now another day and you have not slept. You must devise a way so that you sleep a little if he is quiet and steady. If you do not sleep you might become unclear in the head'" (77). This quote from the old man shows how he has had no sleep in days and is very fatigued. If he loses any more sleep he will begin to hallucinate which will not be good while he is alone at see.
Santiago was very lonely during his fishing trip which was another obstacle. The only company that he had was his mind, the birds, and the fish while he was at sea. Manolin, the young boy who usually fished with Santiago, was no longer allowed to go fishing with him because of his parents, and that left Santiago with no one to help him out at sea. "Yes. If the boy were here. If the boy were here" (83) shows that the old man needed the boy in more ways than one while out on the sea. The old man needed him to help him fish, but he also needed him to keep him company. When Santiago says, "If the others heard me talking out loud they would think that I am crazy" (39), you can tell that he is lonely because he was talking out loud, but he doesn't care what people think about him because he needs himself to keep his head clear.

After Santiago caught the marlin, vicious sharks began to attack it. He had to protect the fish from the sharks, and he also had to protect himself. "But the shark came up fast with his head out and the old man hit him squarely in the center of his flat-topped head as his nose came out of the water and lay against the fish" (109). Hemmingway used a great amount of detail in this portion of the book such as this quote shows to explain what Santiago needed to do in order to protect the marlin. The sharks were one of the greatest obstacles in Santiago's way because he had already caught the fish, and all he had to do was get the marlin safely back to shore. His goal, however, was not achieved when the sharks began to devour it. He ended up only bringing back a skeleton as proof of his epic fishing trip.

In conclusion, Santiago faced many different obstacles in the novella The Old Man and the Sea. He faced fatigue, loneliness, and vicious sharks throughout the story. Sometimes, obstacles can cause people to become stronger people. Even though Santiago was physically weak by the end of the story he was more emotionally and mentally stronger.

10 comments:

Anonymous said...

Hey Linds :]
Great essay! To start this off, your thesis statement was great. It was simple, easy to pick out, and really helped to introduce the rest of your essay very nicely. I think out of the many quotes in your essay, the third one was the best placed. You stuck it right in the middle of the sentence and it definitely helped the story flow. It made complete sense and I agree with your quote of choice. One of your strengths in the essay was your voice. I could tell that it was something you believed in, otherwise it would have been just another essay on the blog. I don’t really have any suggestions, so, once again, great job!

Anonymous said...

Lindsey, great job!! To start off, your thesis was clear and concise. You also made it easy to find in the beginning paragraph, so we all knew what your essay would be about. I really think you best example was the shark attacks. It was clear and easy to understand, and you described it perfectly. I also like the quote you incorporated with it. Overall, I think you have a great vocabulary throughout your essay. Every word fit in perfectly, like a puzzle. Great word choice. No suggestions I can think up, great work!!

Anonymous said...

I really liked your essay. I think that it was written really well. I think that the thesis statement was clear and to the point leaving no margin of confusion for the reader. I think that your strongest paragraph was your last supporting detail paragraph because it had a lot of detail and the vocabulary you used was really vivid. I think the best quote in your essay was "If the others heard me talking out loud they would think that I am crazy" I think that you incorporated it into your writing and made it fit. It didn't semm out of place of as if it didn't belong there. There is nothing that I would change about your essay I think that it was really good.

Anonymous said...

Lindsey, great job!
Your thesis statement was really straight forward and clear. I liked how the first quote, "'But you have not slept yet, old man,' he said aloud. 'It is half a day and a night and now another day and you have not slept. You must devise a way so that you sleep a little if he is quiet and steady. If you do not sleep you might become unclear in the head'" was incorporated into your paragraph. I think the voice and word choice was really strong in your essay. I don't really think I would change anything. Good job.

Anonymous said...

I " Santiago faced fatigue, loneliness, and vicious sharks while on his trip. " is the thesis statement. It is ver clear, concise and focused. It stands out as the thesis statement, but also works with the rest of the paragraph.

II "'But you have not slept yet, old man,' he said aloud. 'It is half a day and a night and now another day and you have not slept. You must devise a way so that you sleep a little if he is quiet and steady. If you do not sleep you might become unclear in the head'" (77). was the strongest quote because it was very informative and made its point well.

III One thing the essay does well is that it has good vocabulary and word use like "His goal, however, was not achieved when the sharks began to devour it. He ended up only bringing back a skeleton as proof of his epic fishing trip."

IV I can't find much wrong with the essay, not even any spelling errors, so i'll just say to maybe find more, better, quotes for it, even though those quotes work fine.

Anonymous said...

Lindsey
Your essay was very well written and I enjoyed reading it. Your thesis statement (" Santiago faced fatigue, loneliness, and vicious sharks while on his trip. " ) was very clear and to the point which was good. My favorite quote you picked was the last one because I liked how you placed it. You put it in the middle of a sentence which added a nice variety. Your essay had great vocabulary. I liked when you said, "His goal, however, was not achieved when the sharks began to devour it." That was really descriptive. I don't see any need for improvement. Good job!

Anonymous said...

Hey Lindsey. Your essay was really good. Your thesis statement was obvious, which is good. Easily picked out and identified. It was focused and clear, and told me what the essay was going to be about. "If the others heard me talking out loud they would think that I am crazy" (39), i think is the best quote in your essay. I think this for two reasons. First because its true. Second, because of how you incorporated it into your essay. The way you did this made it strongly support what you were trying to say. One thing that I think you did really well was that your essay sounded like you. It might sound kind of weird, but while I was reading it, I could kind of hear you saying each word. This made your essay really unique. One peice of advice that I have for you is to losen up a bit. While it sounded like you, it was kind of uncomfortable? I don't know how to explain it, but maybe loosen up a little. Anyways, great job on your essay!

Anonymous said...

Nice essay Lindsey. Your thesis was very clear. It was an excellent choice. Your second quote was the best. It was a great example of what you were saying in the paragraph. It also supported the entire story. I think that your story's fluency was great, and i like the vocabulary you used. One suggestion is making it a little longer, but other than tht great job.

Anonymous said...

Lindsey, I really liked your essay. I thought you had a very strong thesis statement and it was very easy to understand. My favorite quote you used was "'But you have not slept yet, old man,' he said aloud. 'It is half a day and a night and now another day and you have not slept. You must devise a way so that you sleep a little if he is quiet and steady. If you do not sleep you might become unclear in the head'" I chose this quote because it proves your overall point and its a very strong quote. It has a lot of description and detail in it. I think that by using this quote, your first paragraph was the strongest. The quote flowed very well with your writing. One thing I think you did very well in your essay was that you used a lot of description. I could easily understand everything you were relating and that made your writing a lot more clearer and interesting to read. I don't think you need to change anything about your essay.

Anonymous said...

hey lindsey!!
that was totally awesome! i could right away understand what you were talking about and what your thesis statement was. it was very clear and understandable. the best part of your essay would be... probably the intro. it was really good. my favorite quote was that really long one. you had a couple of mistakes. and my favorite mistake is when you had used the wrong 'sea' in 'If he loses any more sleep he will begin to hallucinate which will not be good while he is alone at see.' other than that it was really good. great job!