Monday, March 24, 2008

By Morgan P.

In the novella, The Old Man and the Sea, Santiago, a perseverant old man, had to overcome many obstacles. Some of these included his hand cramping up, fatigue, and battling sharks. Each of these obstacles demonstrated Santiago’s strength and courage, that isn’t commonly found in men his age.

When Santiago had first caught the marlin, he began to think that everything was going to be just fine. Then, his left hand cramped up. This angered Santiago a good deal. “’What kind of hand is that,’ he said. ‘Cramp then if you want. Make yourself into a claw. It will do you no good’” (58). Santiago catches a fish one handed, and eats as an attempt to relax his muscle. He continues to massage his left hand with his right one. When he feels the line rising with his right hand, he manages to maintain control of the line and the marlin. He does not release his magnificent catch because of something as insignificant, but yet useful, as his left hand cramping up.

Being out at sea for three days, by himself in a skiff, with hardly any food or water, Santiago found himself extremely worn out. The huge marlin was pulling the skiff out to sea at an alarmingly quick pace, and Santiago was doing all he could to keep control over the fish. When Santiago felt the fish begin to slow, he sympathized with the marlin. “[Santiago] held steady, and settled back against the strain of the line. ‘You’re feeling it now, fish,’ he said. ‘And God knows, so am I’” (56 ). Santiago openly admits that he is fatigued. When a man as determined as Santiago admits to being tired, you know that he is exhausted. But he fights through this exhaustion, and is still able to catch the marlin.

When Santiago finally caught the marlin, he faced something that, considering the circumstances, almost nobody else could’ve come out alive. If having a catch of an eighteen foot marlin, being out to sea for four days, and having almost no food, water, or sleep weren’t enough, why not just add in a couple sharks? “He hit [the shark] with his blood mushed hands driving a harpoon in with all his strength. He hit it without hope, but with resolution and complete malignancy” (102). Santiago battled his first shark that day. There would be many more to come. And he would battle all of them, striving to protect his catch.

Throughout Ernest Hemingway’s Old Man and the Sea Santiago faces many obstacles. Obstacles, that probably took just about a miracle to overcome. However, miracle or no miracle, Santiago did overcome all of them. He may have returned home with just the skeleton of what had been a great fish, but he returned home safely. Some may say that he ‘lost’. But in my eyes, Santiago is, and always will be, a winner. He overcame the many obstacles that this portion of his life threw at him. Even in his old age, he survived. Even in his old age, he never gave up.

28 comments:

Anonymous said...

morgan,
wow good story. i could deff. tell where your thesis statement was. "Some of these included his hand cramping up, fatigue, and battling sharks."
my favorite quote was the one in the 1st paragraph. it is really well incorporated into the story.
something i liked was your wide span of vocabulary, even though i didnt know what some of the words meant. i also liked pretty much all of your last paragraph. it summed everything up nicely.
something i would change.....i dont think i would really change aything. everything flowed great and made a lot of sense. Great Job!

Anonymous said...

Great essay!! Your thesis statement was “Some of these included his hand cramping up, fatigue, and battling sharks.” It was well written and flowed nice in the introduction. I liked the way you used your first quote I think it was incorporated the best with its paragraph. I think the best part was the conclusion and your word choice. “Even in his old age, he never gave up.” It wrapped the whole essay up and was nicely written. I don’t think I would change any part of it, it was amazing!

Anonymous said...

Hey Morgan,
Good job on the essay! You had a really great thesis statement. "Some of these included his hand cramping up, fatigue, and battling sharks." It had all of the necessary information and it was simple enough that it fit very well. My favorite quote was the first one. It flowed with the rest of the essay and I really thought it fit very well into the paragraph’s topic. You had a great voice in the essay and I thought that your choice of vocab added to the essay. I don’t think I’d change anything, so good job. :]

Anonymous said...

Morgan, as always, your essay was great! You thesis was really clear, and was a perfect introductin for your essay. I really think you best example was Santiago's hand cramps. The quote your picked was good, and you really explained that one the best in my opinion. Overall, I think you really have a good word choice. You don't overuse any words, and you steer clear of a simple vocabulary. I don't think you should change anything, it all worked great together. Awesome job!!

Anonymous said...

Morgan,
i really ejoyed readin your story. It was very descriptive at all times. And your thesis statement stood out. "some of there indluded his hand cramping up, fatigue, and battling sharks." Right away you know what your essay is going to be about.
One thing was well done was word choice. i thought your use of vocabulary was excellent. And you werent repetitive with words. And your last paragraph was good. It summed everythong up very well. and i have no advice for you. great job!

Anonymous said...

MORGAN!!
Great Job on the essay. Your thesis statement, “Some of these included his hand cramping up, fatigue, and battling sharks.” was really clear and focused. The first quote was really well incorporated into the paragraph. I really liked your word choice, and I don't think I would really change anything. You summed up the essay really well with the last paragraph. Good work!

Anonymous said...

Great story. I really liked it. Your thesis statement was clear and to the point and that is what I think made it good. I can't really pick your strongest paragraph because they were all really strong. I think that all of your quotes are well incorporated into the story but my favorite is“He hit [the shark] with his blood mushed hands driving a harpoon in with all his strength. He hit it without hope, but with resolution and complete malignancy” I really like the woring and how you incorporated it into the paragraph.
I also think that you used a lot of detail and great vocabulary. I don't think I would change anything about your essay I honestly thought that it was really good. Great Job.

Anonymous said...

Morgan,
i liked your essay a lot! it was well-written and started off with a clear thesis, that informs the reader about the essay. your best quote was the third quote. it provided evidence of a struggle he faced, as well as the effect, or results of another obstical that he had faced earlier, that which left him with "blood mushed hands". your use of vocab really stood out to me. within the first sentence of the essay you're using words like, "perseverant". my advice to you is to check for grammer errors when your revising.
other than that it was greatt!

Anonymous said...

Morgan,
Good job on your essay! It was very well written, I liked your thesis statement a lot, I thought that the best part of your essay was how you put in a lot of detail, and you used very good vocabulary and description words. My favorite quote from the reading was “’What kind of hand is that,’ he said. ‘Cramp then if you want. Make yourself into a claw. It will do you no good’” (58). You really showed his frustration in that scene. I don’t have any suggestions for you, because it was soo good!

Anonymous said...

Morgan P.
Very good story. I could easily tell what your thesis statement. I thought the best paragraph and quote were the first ones because the quote was well used and the obstacle was well explained. I thought that your vocabulary was used very well throughout the story to more specifically describe events. I don't think there was anything to change because it was really good all around.

Anonymous said...

Heyyyy =)
Well I guess I got to start writing your comment instead of being silly. Man, I hope Mr. BG doesn’t read this part !!

The thesis is very clear and led the essay to a good start. I liked that you stated the exact obstacles you would further describe. The strongest quotation was the last one because it gave a strong image and helped me to understand just how brutal the fight with the sharks was.
This essay does well with staying on topic. It always relates to what the point is and is not confusing in any way. An example is, “When a man as determined as Santiago admits to being tired, you know that he is exhausted. But he fights through this exhaustion, and is still able to catch the marlin.”
One piece of advice I would give is to put a little more voice in it. Show how strong your writing can be. Great job babeeeee =)

Anonymous said...

Morgan!
Your essay was amazing. Your thesis statement, " "Some of these included his hand cramping up, fatigue, and battling sharks," was very clear and focued.My favorite quote was the one in the first supporting paragraph. It flowed with the rest of the essay well and I really thought it fit very well with the paragraph’s main point. I liked how your essay had a lot of detail and good vocabulary. An example of vocab is how you used the word "perseverant." I dont have any suggestions for change because it was so good. Good Job!

Anonymous said...

morgan, i loved your essay!! Your thesis was extremely clear. It was focused and to the point. My favorite quote was the first one. It was a good quote and made your essay strong. You explained it well and made it fit into the paragraph.
Your best trait is your word choice. You have an amazing vocabulary and you put it to good use in your essay. Your conclusion was also a really strong point in your essay.
I really can't think of anything to change. It was amazing!! good job!!!

Anonymous said...

The thesis in the essay is easy to point out. "Some of these included his hand cramping up, fatigue, and battling sharks."
I think the second quote works best because it shows how the old man was also in pain. It was incorporated very well into your essay.
I think your strongest point in your writing is organization and vocab because you always do a really nice job of using a lot of different words, and your writing always flows very nicely.
I don't think I can give you any advice because everything was very well written!

Anonymous said...

Morgan that was a very catchy story. There was no doubt what your thesis statement was. I love when you used the word "perseverant". It was a good way to explain the old man, and that is what caught my eye. It also gets right to the point. I thought the third paragraph was the best. Everything just flowed together, and the quote fit good too. It was also cathy in a way when you said,"If having a catch of an eighteen foot marlin, being out to sea for four days, and having almost no food, water, or sleep weren’t enough, why not just add in a couple sharks?". I love this sentence, it is funny. I thought your writing style was the best. An example would be the sentence in quotations, before this sentence. I don't know if I have any advice. You had a thesis, a lot of information, everything flowed, and your ending paragraph was SUPERB!!!

Anonymous said...

Morgan,
Good essay. My favorite quote was the one in the 1st paragraph. it is really well incorporated into the story. something I liked was your wide span of vocabulary. I also liked last paragraph. It summed everything up nicely. Great Job

Anonymous said...

That was a great essay Morgan. Your thesis statement was very clear, although it was not very focused. It was very engaging. I thought that the third quote was the strongest, because it was the longest, most descriptive, and best integrated into the story. Your essay was very well-organized and used good descriptive words. I wouldn't really change anything about the essay.

Anonymous said...

Morgan,
Good job. Your thesis was so clear to me that it was about Santiago's obsticles at sea. I liked your use of word choice in the introduction describing him. “’What kind of hand is that,’ he said. ‘Cramp then if you want. Make yourself into a claw. It will do you no good’” (58). This was my favorite quote because it shows how Santiago makes it work when the going gets tough. He is resilient when he is determined and focused. I really liked your conclusion the most. "Even in his old age, he survived. Even in his old age, he never gave up." I liked your last sentences because if an old person who is fishing for a giant marlin in the middle of the ocean, with limited supplies, and doesn't give up then there is no excuse for someone to give up for nothing. I can't think of any advice to give you. Fantastic!

Anonymous said...

Morgan,
Good job. Your thesis was so clear to me that it was about Santiago's obsticles at sea. I liked your use of word choice in the introduction describing him. “’What kind of hand is that,’ he said. ‘Cramp then if you want. Make yourself into a claw. It will do you no good’” (58). This was my favorite quote because it shows how Santiago makes it work when the going gets tough. He is resilient when he is determined and focused. I really liked your conclusion the most. "Even in his old age, he survived. Even in his old age, he never gave up." I liked your last sentences because if an old person who is fishing for a giant marlin in the middle of the ocean, with limited supplies, and doesn't give up then there is no excuse for someone to give up for nothing. I can't think of any advice to give you. Fantastic!

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