Monday, March 24, 2008

By John B.

In the story The Old Man and the Sea by Ernest Hemingway, the main character Santiago is faced with many obstacles. While trying to catch one of the biggest fish he has ever seen, Santiago struggles with a few physical and mental problems. Also there are some living obstacles in his way too. Santiago decided not to bring any food on his boat either, which took away time from trying to concentrate on catching the Marlin. As you can see there are many things in Santiago’s way.

As Santiago tries to hold on to the fishing line for several days he starts to feel some aches and pains in his hands. In his left hand he experienced some aches and pains from when he had arm wrestled a “Negro” for approximately one day. “For a long time after that everyone had called him “The Champion” and there had been a return match in the spring.”(70) Santiago had still one the match even though his left hand had always given him trouble. During the arm wrestling match everyone had supported the “Negro” by lighting his cigarettes and bring him drinks. This was a disadvantage because he also cut his right hand while holding the fishing line. So both of his hands are very weak.

Santiago is the only person out in the deep of the see all by himself. His loneliness has him always talking to himself. By talking to himself he can remember things from the past and one of his best friends Manolin. If Santiago had the company of his friend he might have had a better chance at catching the Marlin. Also if the boy was with him it would keep him company and he would be a lot less lonely. Aloud he said “I wish I had the boy.” (51) The boy would have given the Old Man a better chance at catching the Marlin. As you can see Santiago needed the boy for company and the help as well.

After a long and exciting voyage in the sea all ends well with Santiago and the Marlin. Santiago had realized that he had let the fish swim way to far out in the ocean. That was where the sharks had lived and swam. There were a few sharks and they decided to eat Santiago’s Marlin in which he had followed for many days. One by one the fish and Santiago tried to defeat the sharks. It wasn’t helping out the best. Santiago’s Marlin had been eaten by the sharks. All that was left to take home was its bones. “He saw the white naked line of his backbone and the dark mass of the head with the projecting bill and all the nakedness between.” (121) All Santiago had to bring back was the Marlins remains and the remembrance of the journey he went on.

The main character Santiago, in The Old Man and the Sea, faced so many problems in his voyage. In the end everything turned out to be what nobody would have ever imagined. From hand cramps, to being lonely, and sharks, Santiago handled things very well for an Old Man. I have been to many different places before and I still remember them from about seven years ago, and I will probably remember the trip for the rest of my life. Santiago overall learned a lesson, just because he didn’t succeed he still had one special experience that nobody but him would have ever had. Even though Santiago had lost his prize, he will never forget the experience

8 comments:

Anonymous said...

JOHN BERARD SWEET ESSAY YOU DID NASTY. My favorite and in my opinion, the best part of the story was your thesis. It caught my attention from the beginning and you kept it there throughout the story. The first quotation I thought it was the best. This was a part where Santiago was feeling very low, and you described it well. You had very good descriptions of on going situations. Another thing you did well was the grammar in the story it was flawless. I advise you to work on your conclusion next time though that needs a little work. Great Job though Homie...Peace

Anonymous said...

John,

Nice essay! I think that it was clear that your thesis had to do with the struggles that Santiago went through. It was engaging.

The strongest quotation was“I wish I had the boy.” (51) This really goes well with what you were trying to say.

The essay's best quality is it's conclusion. I like how it was worded. An example of this is " Santiago overall learned a lesson, just because he didn’t succeed he still had one special experience that nobody but him would have ever had. Even though Santiago had lost his prize, he will never forget the experience."

The advice that I would give is to read your essay over for mistakes. I thought it was very well written.

Anonymous said...

Mom says:
I wrote a paper very similar to this when I was a freshman at SHHS. It was one of the most trying papers I had ever written and my teacher was very very tough!!! It kind of turned me off of Hemingway forever! However, reading your brother's paper and now your's has given me hope when it comes to Hemingway. Your essay was well written and your descriptions were well portrayed!
Keep up the good work son!

Anonymous said...

Very good essay john. The Thesis makes sense,a nd engages the reading nicely.“For a long time after that everyone had called him “The Champion” and there had been a return match in the spring.”(70). this makes alot of sense, and is nicely said. One thing that the the esay portrays well is details. It has many different parts of information, andis explained well. No Revisions.

Anonymous said...

I "While trying to catch one of the biggest fish he has ever seen, Santiago struggles with a few physical and mental problems. Also there are some living obstacles in his way too. Santiago decided not to bring any food on his boat either, which took away time from trying to concentrate on catching the Marlin." Is the thesis statement. It is not very clear because it isn't in one sentence, but it's still focused.

II "“He saw the white naked line of his backbone and the dark mass of the head with the projecting bill and all the nakedness between.” (121)Is the strongest quote because it gives you a good picture of the scene and is kindof sad.

III One thing this essay does well is that it brings up the arm wrestling competition as a reason for his left hand cramps. (“For a long time after that everyone had called him “The Champion” and there had been a return match in the spring.”(70)) I haven't seen any other essays do that.

IV I can't think of much problems with it, but there were a few spelling mistakes + repetative stuff in there. The useual. So just revise it in the future.

Anonymous said...

I thought you did very well on this thesis. For someone who hasn't read this, I now have a great idea of what it's all about. It got my attention and intrigue enough to make me get interested in not only your story but in possibly reading the book myself.
Nice work John!!

Anonymous said...

John,
The Thesis makes sense, and engages the reading nicely. One thing that the essay portrays well is details. It has many different parts of information, and is explained well.

Anonymous said...

Hi John, i got lost so i chose your essay, jk.
1- nice thesis, it was clear, but u didn't really pull me in that much
2-the best quote was the second one, it fit in the best
3- i liked the second body best, it just seemed the best and the most interesting
4- there were a few minor errors, watch our for those.