Thursday, April 12, 2007

Heaven Fallen by Alaina H.

7:49 AM Mr. B-G

The girl looked like she was from heaven
Then she fell, we knew it was Devan
Devan dropped to the floor
Causing a big red sore
But that’s okay cause she’s just seven

2 comments:

Anonymous said...

i loved your poem. after reading it i liked the rhyming. it was really creative and i could create an image in my mind when reading it. i am kind of sad for Devan and her big red soreee. I felt that because of the 3rd and 4th lines..i really liked your poem because it was so unique and made me wonder how she could fall from heaven. it was GREATTTT<3

11:27 AM
Anonymous said...

Alainaa this was beautiful. It made me feel warm and fuzzy insidee. I'm sure FCharles Mew Banc would enjoy it very much. I think you should read it to him. I loved how you put it together and made it work, it was a very well written poem, good jobb! =)

11:58 AM

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