7:24 AM
Mr. B-G
I like to run it makes me free
Sun in my face but I still see
Wind blows my hair I like the feel
When I’m running my life feels real
Road has no end that’s what I like
Speed past little kids riding bikes
Run so hard blood leaks from my heel
When I’m running my life feels real
I’ll run until the day turns night
A burning in my heart ignites
Run a race first place I will steal
When I running, my life feels real.
Sun in my face but I still see
Wind blows my hair I like the feel
When I’m running my life feels real
Road has no end that’s what I like
Speed past little kids riding bikes
Run so hard blood leaks from my heel
When I’m running my life feels real
I’ll run until the day turns night
A burning in my heart ignites
Run a race first place I will steal
When I running, my life feels real.
5 comments:
Lyndss,
I felt intrigued after this poem. I really enjoyed reading this, you used really well descripton of how you feel. I loved the way you made it seem so glorious yet real all at the same time. "run so hard blood leaks from my heals" would normally sound weird and gross but the way you put it worked great. The poem reminded me of those nike commercials when the woman are running and passing by all these different things but never stopping. AWESOME JOB.MWA!!!!
I really liked this poem. I like how it talks about running because i like to run. You used very good, desriptive lines. This poem made me feel happy. I liked the line " i like to run it makes me free sun in my face but i still see" I liked this line because i can really picture it. I can kind of relate because whenever you go running on a nice day , the sun is in your face. I thought this poem was good rhyming and a very good poem over all ! =)
This poem was realy good. The description was so good I loved it a alot. After reading the poem it makes running sound like a whole different place or something. Greeeat Job
lynnnnnnnny!
i love this poem so much chikca! I can picture you just running all day long because your soo good at it! This poem made me happy because it was really good, like no lie it was such a well written poem. You made me want to go out and run. and i hate running! Also i loved the rhyming so much. love you girrrl
lyndss, I love this poem. I can so picture you running. You really showed how much you like to run and how much it completes you. I liked the line "when I'm running my life feels real" it was interesting. You made everything come to life. Good Job!!!!
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